Here is the winner. A bit longer than mine and on a more emotional note. I also noticed a few sloppy typos on my entry. Dang it, gotta tighten up!.
My piece is converted from a humorous speech I did very well with in Toastmasters. In retrospect, the speech "Smack Talk" was too complicated and needed to be simplified (see video below). Stay tuned - I may start a similar blog, or at least do a couple articles on competitive speaking.